California - Revision history

Gabemcelwain at 00:58, 3 September 2009

2009-09-03T00:58:32Z

Conorl: /* Comments */

2008-03-24T13:27:48Z

‎Comments

Conorl: /* Comments */

2008-03-24T13:26:49Z

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Conorl at 13:26, 24 March 2008

2008-03-24T13:26:14Z

Gabemcelwain: /* Chords */

2007-04-12T22:12:07Z

‎Chords

Sara at 06:15, 12 April 2007

2007-04-12T06:15:35Z

Gabemcelwain at 19:04, 3 March 2007

2007-03-03T19:04:42Z

Gabemcelwain at 18:52, 3 March 2007

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Sara at 04:53, 3 March 2007

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Sara at 04:52, 3 March 2007

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 [[Category:Songs]]
 [[Category:Gabe McElwain (Chicago)]]
 [[Image:CAcoin.jpg|thumb|The Golden State]]
 [[Media:california.mp3|California - MP3]]

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 [[User:Sara|Sara]] 23:15, 11 April 2007 (PDT)
-I was a little surprised to see that you wrote this song. I think I heard Becky play it in our apartment and assumed that she wrote it. It's totally plausible as a Becky song, but it makes sense in your catalog. I am a huge fan of your short songs (California, Snuggle, Fireman etc). You have a knack for writing short pieces that sound complete, interesting, and mysterious.
+I was a little surprised to see that you wrote this song. I think I heard Becky play it in our apartment and assumed that she wrote it. It's totally plausible as a Becky song, but it makes sense in your catalog too. I am a huge fan of your short songs (California, Snuggle, Fireman etc). You have a knack for writing short pieces that sound complete, interesting, and mysterious.
 #The melody is great, and you do a great job sing it
 #You have some killer lines here. "forty-nine of these united states will cling to one another / just the way the lord designed them to" is particularly amazing to me.

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	#I love the slightly non-sequitur ending "i just didn't think she'd want to leave so soon". It's a little jarring in a wonderful way. For me, the parallel between California being doomed and a relationship being doomed snaps into focus all of a sudden. Its great.		#I love the slightly non-sequitur ending "i just didn't think she'd want to leave so soon". It's a little jarring in a wonderful way. For me, the parallel between California being doomed and a relationship being doomed snaps into focus all of a sudden. Its great.
	#Like your other short songs, the pacing is perfect. You keep the song moving through the structure so that when it ends, it doesn't feel truncated, instead it feels like a mini-universe, like a snow globe or something. Tiny and complete.		#Like your other short songs, the pacing is perfect. You keep the song moving through the structure so that when it ends, it doesn't feel truncated, instead it feels like a mini-universe, like a snow globe or something. Tiny and complete.
		+	[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 06:26, 24 March 2008 (PDT)

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	i need the rest of the chords so i can cover the hell out of this. i don't know why, but it took me a long time to realize this song is not merely good. it's excellent! i love the line "sink into the silent depths below," very graphic and still serene. this song is very fun to sing along to, particularly the passerines version on pure hype from feb 07. anyway. i am not articulating it well so i will give up now, but this song makes my day, like, every single day.		i need the rest of the chords so i can cover the hell out of this. i don't know why, but it took me a long time to realize this song is not merely good. it's excellent! i love the line "sink into the silent depths below," very graphic and still serene. this song is very fun to sing along to, particularly the passerines version on pure hype from feb 07. anyway. i am not articulating it well so i will give up now, but this song makes my day, like, every single day.
	[[User:Sara\|Sara]] 23:15, 11 April 2007 (PDT)		[[User:Sara\|Sara]] 23:15, 11 April 2007 (PDT)
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		+	I was a little surprised to see that you wrote this song. I think I heard Becky play it in our apartment and assumed that she wrote it. It's totally plausible as a Becky song, but it makes sense in your catalog. I am a huge fan of your short songs (California, Snuggle, Fireman etc). You have a knack for writing short pieces that sound complete, interesting, and mysterious.
		+	#The melody is great, and you do a great job sing it
		+	#You have some killer lines here. "forty-nine of these united states will cling to one another / just the way the lord designed them to" is particularly amazing to me.
		+	#I love the slightly non-sequitur ending "i just didn't think she'd want to leave so soon". It's a little jarring in a wonderful way. For me, the parallel between California being doomed and a relationship being doomed snaps into focus all of a sudden. Its great.
		+	#Like your other short songs, the pacing is perfect. You keep the song moving through the structure so that when it ends, it doesn't feel truncated, instead it feels like a mini-universe, like a snow globe or something. Tiny and complete.

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 == Music ==
 ===Chords===
-It's in D major, but that's an A minor chord into the verse in the first half to sweeten the deal. (The second time around, that chord's a D7 with an A in the bass.)
 ===Structure===

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	== Comments ==		== Comments ==
		+	i need the rest of the chords so i can cover the hell out of this. i don't know why, but it took me a long time to realize this song is not merely good. it's excellent! i love the line "sink into the silent depths below," very graphic and still serene. this song is very fun to sing along to, particularly the passerines version on pure hype from feb 07. anyway. i am not articulating it well so i will give up now, but this song makes my day, like, every single day.
		+	[[User:Sara\|Sara]] 23:15, 11 April 2007 (PDT)