Firecracker - Revision history

Sara at 15:53, 6 October 2007

2007-10-06T15:53:33Z

2007-09-24T06:18:40Z

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‎Lyrics

2007-09-24T00:10:48Z

‎Chords

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‎Comments

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 another four-alarm morning
-brings another day of earning
+another day of earning
 pushing buttons on a screen
 secretly you start the countdown

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 == Music ==
 ===Chords===
-  a:
+  verse a:
   C, E, Am, F x 3
-  b (quarter-time?):
+  verse b (quarter-time?):
   C, E, Am, F
   C, E, Am, Bb, G
-  c:
+  outro:
   F, G, C, C
   F, G, C, E x 2
   F, G, C, C
 ===Structure===
-a-b-a-b-a-b-c-c
+ verse a
 == Author's Notes ==

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 your burning desire
 every yawn behind your hand fans the fire
 pull another yesterday off the calendar

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 pushing buttons on a screen
 secretly you start the countdown
-your burning desire, you'd jump out of the pan into the fire
+your burning desire
 pull another yesterday off the calendar

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   b (quarter-time?):
   C, E, Am, F
-  C, E, Am, B7, G
+  C, E, Am, Bb, G
   c:

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	[[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:07, 10 September 2007 (PDT)		[[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:07, 10 September 2007 (PDT)
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		+	oh man. i love the new 'lousy' version. how are we going to have time to learn all these awesome songs?????? there just aren't enough days in the fuck fuck week. -e

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 [[Category:Songs]]
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-[[Media:Firecracker.mp3|old version with a lot of words]]
+[[Media:Firecracker.mp3|old version with a lot of words]]<br>
-[[Media:Firecracker-redo.mp3‎|revised version with fewer words, bad singing/playing]]
+[[Media:Firecracker-redo.mp3|new version with lousy singing/playing]]
 [[Image:firecrackers.jpg|thumb|boom]]
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 ===Chords===
   a:
-  C, E, Am, F (?) x 3
+  C, E, Am, F x 3
   b (quarter-time?):
-  C, E, Am, F (?)
+  C, E, Am, F
   C, E, Am, B7, G
   c:
-  F (?), G, C, C
+  F, G, C, C
   F, G, C, E x 2
   F, G, C, C

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 [[Category:Songs]]
 [[Category:Sara johnsen (san francisco)]]
-[[Media:Firecracker.mp3|boy that was a lot of words]]
+[[Media:Firecracker.mp3|old version with a lot of words]]
 [[Image:firecrackers.jpg|thumb|boom]]
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 this is just a sketch so i don't forget. having trouble writing words/songs/rational melodies that i like, lately, meh. i like the "slow explosion" line, though. the melody of the "b" section is an almost total disaster, possibly because there are way too many words. kind of considering just throwing out the "c" section with its boring melody, and making "b" the "chorus"... hmm. what a mess! however, i <3 you my farfisa. [[User:Sara|Sara]] 17:38, 8 September 2007 (PDT)
-ok, revised it a bit, removed some words, bumped c to the ending only. not sure if this works, i think there should be a noisy swell and crazy transition into c. unfortunately my voice is out of commission for the near future. bummer, bummer, bummer. [[User:Sara|Sara]] 01:48, 14 September 2007 (PDT)
+ok, revised it a bit, removed some words, bumped c to the ending only. not sure if this works, i think there should be a noisy swell and crazy transition into c. unfortunately my voice is out of commission for the near future, stupid idiot injury prevents high notes. how is that even possible? bummer, bummer, bummer. [[User:Sara|Sara]] 01:48, 14 September 2007 (PDT)
 == Comments ==

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 and dream where you'll blow up
 by night you watch the wick as it burns out
 sweep up the ash and start it all again
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 brings another day of earning
 pushing buttons on a screen
-secretly you send a message
+secretly you start the countdown
-if there's a trace, a comet trail
+your burning desire, you'd jump out of the pan into the fire
 pull another yesterday off the calendar
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 buildings collapse with the sound
 they'll see you go up for miles around
-you go up as you burn to the ground</pre>
+you go up as you burn to the ground
 == Music ==
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 ===Structure===
-a-b-a-b-c-a-b-c-c
+a-b-a-b-a-b-c-c
 == Author's Notes ==
 this is just a sketch so i don't forget. having trouble writing words/songs/rational melodies that i like, lately, meh. i like the "slow explosion" line, though. the melody of the "b" section is an almost total disaster, possibly because there are way too many words. kind of considering just throwing out the "c" section with its boring melody, and making "b" the "chorus"... hmm. what a mess! however, i <3 you my farfisa. [[User:Sara|Sara]] 17:38, 8 September 2007 (PDT)
 == Comments ==

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	== Comments ==		== Comments ==
		+	the A section is rad. very nice melody. gotta love E major in the key of C. (this progression was once used to great effect in a little song called, "lime." don't let that give you pause! your rhythm and melody are totally different, and only a first coat nerd devotee like myself would even notice.)
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		+	i think you're selling the B section short. it's not as rad as the A section, but the first instance of it is really great. i think i like it in particular there because there are fewer words you're trying to cram in, so the melody is less burdened. i think it's good to slow the pace of the melody there as well, which gives you a break from the A section.
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		+	i am not terribly attached to the C section except for the phrase "shuttle up", which is like, "shut up". i really do like the way you wrap it around onto itself and the harmonies during the last two times through, though. and it makes a nice breakdown.
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		+	these lyrics are not at all bad. for someone having trouble writing, this is awesome. i was going to list my favorite lines, but there are too many in here! keep at it.
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		+	[[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:07, 10 September 2007 (PDT)