Happiness is easy - Revision history

Sara at 05:02, 3 March 2007

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Gabemcelwain: /* Comments */

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Gabemcelwain: /* Comments */

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Sara at 06:30, 27 September 2006

2006-09-27T06:30:16Z

Gabemcelwain: /* Comments */

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Sara: /* Chords */

2006-09-21T09:17:25Z

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Sara: /* Chords */

2006-09-21T09:15:40Z

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Sara at 09:10, 21 September 2006

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Sara at 09:04, 21 September 2006

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Sara at 10:55, 20 September 2006

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		+	you'll remember this when you hear it. "the sign" was a staple in my walkman during my seventh grade ohio history trip. that and the spin doctors' live album "homebelly groove". yow.
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 there are maybe too many words? maybe too many changes? i am pretty pleased on the whole though, unless it turns out really did just gank this wholesale from someone else. !!<br>
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 == Comments ==

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	== Comments ==		== Comments ==
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		+	#this song is rad. the way you've arranged the first verse--particularly with the backing beat you've used--makes me think of ace of base. that tom/kick. so good. and ambient crickets. yes.
		+	#anyway, that makes me think you should just go completely mid-90s dance-pop all over this song. note that from me, this is a tremendous compliment. the most appealing part of the track to me is the unmistakable hip-hop swaggar on that first verse, I can totally see you wagging your finger at the camera in the video, backed by a posse of tough/hot-looking girls. are they wearing overalls? rollerskates? it's just got such attitude!
		+	#the excellent dance/hip-hop qualities of the tune make me wish your vocal delivery was just a bit tighter, more agressive, more percussive in places. as if you were rapping.
		+	#that dancey quality also makes me think the arrangement could be cleaner, more minimalistic, or at least more stingently deployed. i know nothing about dance music, but my impression is that you make it good by adding a part at a time in structurally significant moments. i think you do some of this here, and well, but i think you could use a little more restraint and really milk it. for instance, i think the arrangement gets a little out of control after the bridge, which i think causes things to get harmonically a little messy (from "what good are we?" on). this sort of "everything and the kitchen sink" arrangement from that point means that the last refrain is louder, but it isn't as powerful as the others.
		+	#structurally, it's great, but i think you should take out that last instrumental pre-chorus. also, as a life-long proponent of the last chorus breakdown, i think you need to have everything stop, and you just sing, "you're impossible, impossible,im--" and then on the third "--possible" everything comes in for a huge refrain. tell me that wouldn't be so. hot.
		+	#lyrically, some of the stuff scans really well: A. "one wrong step makes the rest worthless" is rhythmic GOLD. B. The whole first verse is outstanding. C. the bridge is solid. oh, if you don't think you should take out that instrumental pre-chorus, as i suggest above, <b>you need to put in a rap in over that part.</b> think: "Don't Turn Around".
		+	#some of the lines don't flow as well to my ears, though: A. i don't much care for the short second verse, to be honest. it seems to be kind of rehashing the first verse, but not as well. though i suppose maybe that's the job of the second verse? B. i guess that's the only part i don't like. nicely done.
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		+	[[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:04, 23 September 2006 (PDT)

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 == Music ==
 === Chords ===
-intro: e flat major, f minor, b flat major
+intro: e flat major, f minor, b flat major<br>
-verse: e flat major, c minor, a flat major, b flat major
+verse: e flat major, c minor, a flat major, b flat major<br>
-prechorus: c minor, b flat major, a flat major, b flat major
+prechorus: c minor, b flat major, a flat major, b flat major<br>
-chorus:
+chorus: c minor, g minor, a flat minor with a major seventh, f minor, c minor, g minor, a flat minor with a major seventh, b flat major<br>
-#c minor, g minor, a flat minor with a major seventh, f minor
+bridge: e flat major, f minor, g minor, a flat major<Br>
-#c minor, g minor, a flat minor with a major seventh, b flat major
+outtro: e flat major, b flat major<br>
 === Structure ===

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 == Author's Notes ==
-i was listening to the totally amazing intro to "three to waltz" by cola wars when the germ of this song appeared. i wrote the lyrics while listening to that track so the rhythm follows it a bit. the verse melody sounds familiar to me, but i'm not sure where/whether i'm ripping it off from. someplace. maybe it's just kind of generic.<br>
+i like saying "happiness is easy," partly because it's kind of obnoxious. a little along the lines of "suicide is painless," aka the theme song from <i>M*A*S*H*</i>. i was listening to the totally amazing intro to "three to waltz" by cola wars when the germ of this song appeared. i wrote the lyrics while listening to that track so the rhythm follows it a bit. the verse melody sounds familiar to me, but i'm not sure where/whether i'm ripping it off from. someplace. maybe it's just kind of generic. in my head this song is basically performed by ok go. i tried to make it pretty to cover up for the fact that i'm not an emo band.<br>
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 this song features my yamaha over and over, plus fruityloops and some crickets.<br>

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 == Author's Notes ==
-this verse melody sounds very familiar to me, but i'm not sure where/whether i'm ripping it off from. someplace.<br>
+i was listening to the totally amazing intro to "three to waltz" by cola wars when the germ of this song appeared. i wrote the lyrics while listening to that track so the rhythm follows it a bit. the verse melody sounds familiar to me, but i'm not sure where/whether i'm ripping it off from. someplace. maybe it's just kind of generic.<br>
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-this song features my yamaha, fruityloops, and some crickets.<br>
+this song features my yamaha over and over, plus fruityloops and some crickets.<br>
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-i think this song is kind of mean and therefore a little ugly. but i like it anyway so here it is.<br>
+i think the sentiment of this song is really ugly. but i like it anyway, so here it is.<br>
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 there are maybe too many words? maybe too many changes? i am pretty pleased on the whole though, unless it turns out really did just gank this wholesale from someone else. !!<br>
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