The Reviews Are In - Revision history

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‎Author's Notes

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‎Lyrics

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 [[Category:Danny O'Brien (cleveland)]]
 [[Category:Gabe McElwain (Chicago)]]
 [[Media:Thereviewsarein2.mp3|The Reviews Are In - MP3]]

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	[[User:DannyOBrien\|DannyOBrien]] 14:22, 19 March 2008 (PDT)		[[User:DannyOBrien\|DannyOBrien]] 14:22, 19 March 2008 (PDT)
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		+	Nice job on the demo, Danny! I just made the slight tweaks to the lyrics that we talked about. Now I'll be able to sleep at night. Seems like despite our reservations, the ending we chose has gone over pretty well. I like it in practice as well as theory, too.
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		+	[[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 08:24, 26 March 2008 (PDT)

	== Comments ==		== Comments ==

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 The characters were too contrived, the setup too complex
-We used up all the budget on the violence and sex
+We used up all the money on the violence and sex
 And had no story
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-But in the end the thrills were too cheap; our public wanted more,
+But in the end the thrills were fleeting; our public wanted more,
 Like a leading pair they’d be rooting for
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 The characters were too contrived, the setup too complex
-We used up all the budget on the violence and sex
+We used up all the money on the violence and sex
 And had no story
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 In this town again
 == Music ==

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	[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)

−	Thanks for ~~kinds~~ words, you two! DK, thanks for noticing rhymes, I had to sweat for some of them! Conor, it's funny that you mention mis-emphasising of a few of the syllables, because you're right--I try never to do that. But in the rare case when I think I might get away with it, I bolster myself by remembering "I Say", in which the emphases are all over the place. It bugged me like crazy at first when the Passerines first started playing it, but I came around to it eventually. Point is, in as much as I'm able to let myself do it, I owe that ability to DK. [[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:56, 24 March 2008 (PDT)	+	Thanks for kind words, you two! DK, thanks for noticing rhymes, I had to sweat for some of them! Conor, it's funny that you mention mis-emphasising of a few of the syllables, because you're right--I try never to do that. But in the rare case when I think I might get away with it, I bolster myself by remembering "I Say", in which the emphases are all over the place. It bugged me like crazy at first when the Passerines first started playing it, but I came around to it eventually. Point is, in as much as I'm able to let myself do it, I owe that ability to DK. [[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:56, 24 March 2008 (PDT)

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	[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)
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		+	Thanks for kinds words, you two! DK, thanks for noticing rhymes, I had to sweat for some of them! Conor, it's funny that you mention mis-emphasising of a few of the syllables, because you're right--I try never to do that. But in the rare case when I think I might get away with it, I bolster myself by remembering "I Say", in which the emphases are all over the place. It bugged me like crazy at first when the Passerines first started playing it, but I came around to it eventually. Point is, in as much as I'm able to let myself do it, I owe that ability to DK. [[User:Gabemcelwain\|Gabemcelwain]] 09:56, 24 March 2008 (PDT)

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 #The rhythm is great. It reminds me of something you'd expect to hear on a washboard, or played with spoons. It fits the song perfectly.
 #I like the way you are putting the emphasis on the wrong syllable. "something is clear" "The reviews are in" It's playful and completely out of character for Gabe.
-#I like the way you don't get the relationship/movie concept until the end of the chorus. "the reviews are in" part builds tension, and then the end of the chorus delivers the punch line. deirdre and i laughed out loud when we got to this part of the song. There are some great lines in this song. The chorus made me laugh out loud.
+#I like the way you don't get the relationship/movie concept until the end of the chorus. "the reviews are in" part builds tension, and then the 2nd part of the chorus delivers the punch line. deirdre and i laughed out loud when we got to this part of the song.
 #The outro (bridge?) is great, and the perfect length. I'm a sucker for descending guitar lines. I love the guitar part that leads into the outro, and the chords are great there. Really great.
 #Lastly, I like the way the rhythm slows down/breaks down at the end, but then comes back in time.
 [[User:Conorl|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)

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	#I like how the intro sounds spy movie-esque.		#I like how the intro sounds spy movie-esque.
	[[User:Dk\|Dk]] 17:10, 23 March 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Dk\|Dk]] 17:10, 23 March 2008 (PDT)
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		+	Brilliant! Deirdre and I burst out laughing when we listened to this song this morning. Here are my thoughts after about 10 listens. . .
		+	#The rhythm is great. It reminds me of something you'd expect to hear on a washboard, or played with spoons. It fits the song perfectly.
		+	#I like the way you are putting the emphasis on the wrong syllable. "something is clear" "The reviews are in" It's playful and completely out of character.
		+	#I like the way you don't get the relationship/movie concept until the end of the chorus. "the reviews are in" part builds tension, and then the end of the chorus delivers the punch line. deirdre and i laughed out loud when we got to this part of the song.
		+	#There are some great lines in this song. The chorus made me laugh out loud.
		+	#The outro (bridge?) is great, and the perfect length. I'm a sucker for descending guitar lines. I love the guitar part that leads into the outro, and the chords are great there. Really great.
		+	#Lastly, I like the way the rhythm slows down/breaks down at the end, but then comes back in time.
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		+	[[User:Conorl\|Conorl]] 17:21, 23 March 2008 (PDT)

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	== Comments ==		== Comments ==
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		+	Fantastic!
		+	#I love the old record effect on the rhythm track.
		+	#The rhymes are all tight yet natural (I especially like "it'll...little," and of course the chorus).
		+	#The ending is brilliant: it sounds like a whiney/sappy line about the relationship but then it turns into a Hollywood cliche, ending the song decisively in the movie rather than break up world (which I find hilarious). The slow-down and then sudden click right back into tempo with the return of the intro is also amazing.
		+	#I like how the intro sounds spy movie-esque.
		+	[[User:Dk\|Dk]] 17:10, 23 March 2008 (PDT)