Take Back Your Name

Take Back Your Name (demo) - MP3

Lyrics

you can keep the ring
i left it on the table
you can keep the table, by the way, that's fine
you can open any mail addressed to both of us
take back your name
it looks awful next to mine

you can keep the sheets
we slept on if you want them
and that undershirt that i liked sleeping in
i am getting the tattoo removed this afternoon
take back your name
it feels awful on my skin

keep my cigarettes 'cause i could use breather
i know i said some awful things but i'm
not taking those back either

you can keep the
memories we made together
of the times we had before this thing went south
you can keep the promises you made to someone else
take back your name
it tastes awful in my mouth

you can keep the ring and when you take the ring back then
take back your name
i won't be speaking it again

Music

Chords

D e 
e A7 D
f# F#7
b b7/A
g#%7 G A7

b E g#%7 e A7

f# F#7
b b7/A G A7 D

Structure

A A B A A'

Notes

I had this idea to write a somewhat humorous song about having to get a tattoo removed after a relationship has ended some time last week, but then working on it today it turned into this. I think it's because I have been listening to "Sad Songs and Waltzes" by Willie Nelson for two days straight. I am just glad to have finished a version of one of these country tunes! I have three or four more in various states of completion, so as long if I can keep starting songs at this rate and finish them a little faster, I'll still have one a month by the end of the year. Gabemcelwain 19:31, 27 February 2009 (PST)

comments

the concept and lyrics for this song are awesome, and the structure is solid. the ideas are compelling and each line is very very tight. there's no wasted space here. i like the way the last line of each verse becomes more personal: "it looks awful next to mine", "it feels awful on my skin", "it tastes awful in my mouth", and "i won't be speaking it again." the bridge is wonderfully spiteful too, i particularly like way "i know i said" echo's "cigarettes" --though i wished that it had been flipped a little more, perhaps have it name some things that the ex-lover should leave? also, there's something about the chord progression that isn't hitting me quite right. you have some really tight rhymes in the verses ("fine/mine", "in/skin", "mouth/south", "then/again") but I'm not hearing them in this recording. I think that its because the first word is on the D chord (I) and then the second word comes when you're on the A7(V7). It may also be the fact that there's a lot of time between the two words. I'm not sure. But there's something about that A7 though. I think it makes the verses sound like a question rather than a statement. I thought maybe it was because you're playing in Dmajor on the guitar and so the A7 resolved up to the D instead of down, but when i played it myself in E major and G major it sounded the same way to me. I'm not sure what it is, but I wish the last two lines of the verse sounded stronger, more certain. Also that's where you have the title of the song, it'd be cool if that part stood out a bit more. All in all though this is very very impressive. The lyrics a very cool, they're direct and precise. nice work. I can't wait to hear more!! Conorl 08:28, 1 March 2009 (PST)